Writer’s Mail
Tuesdays with Story
May 24, 2019
The gathering
TWS alumnus Shel Ellestad returning made it a dozen writers who clustered around tables at B&N Westside Tuesday evening. They critiqued the works of six of their colleagues. Here are some of the thoughts that were shared:
Chris Zoern (chapter 2, Apostate):
Kashmira Sheth and Amit Trivedi (chapters, untitled novel):
Cindi Dyke (chapters 9-10, The Mansion Secrets): Lots of discussion on unpleasant smells, specifically ‘stench’ and whether or not you can collide with it. Larry said no. Tracey considered her son’s shoes, Cindi considered changing a diaper, and both adamantly agreed the answer is yes. Obviously, Larry changes his socks but has not changed diapers. Carved pumpkins could have a moldy smell, but Jerry pointed out they wouldn’t have time to get moldy in just 3 days. Mike suggested Wart could wonder if it is the smell of blood. Several agreed that Clifford’s speech pattern needs to reflect his disability. Issues with POV and overuse of filters needs to be addressed. John said he bought into the story line and liked the ending. Thanks to all – I appreciate your feedback. (more…)
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