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Tuesdays with Story

July 21, 2017

 

Muggy and Melty Summer Round-up from 1st/3rd

We had a guest from Oregon (the state), Summer Bird.  She is co-chair of a writing group in Willamette, Oregon and enjoyed her time visiting our group. Our guest from Oregon is children’s and short story writer. Summer invited us to read a selection of her stories at www.summerbirdstories.com and let her know our thoughts.

Millie Mader (short story, “The Gold Star and the Silver Star”) I wrote from a long ago memory of what I had been told, and searched high and low for the Post Crescent article. It was all true—but not accurate in a number of ways. Millie’s decided to abandon the piece and get on with her short story, Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
July 7, 2017

Tuesday evening at B&N

No meeting on the 1st Tuesday – July 4th.  Hope everyone had a safe and sane holiday.

Who’s up next

July 18: Millie Mader (short story, part 2, “Stone Cold Stripper”), Eva Mays (chapter 13, Dhuoda), Amber Boudreau (chapters 27-30, The Dragoneer), Mike Austin (chapters 10-13, Riding with the Reed Gang), John Stephens (chapter 2), and Jerry Peterson (short story, “Aboard a PT”), Pat Edwards (chapter, Hero’s Journey).

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Tuesdays with Story
June 23, 2017

 

Tuesday evening at B&N

An even dozen of TWS writers crowded around the tables to review the work of seven of our colleagues. Here’s some of what they said:

  • Jen Wilcher (chapter 4, part 2, Hogoshiro Chronicles) . . .nothing submitted
  • Rebecca Rettenmund (new chapter 2, Hunting for Dad) . . .nothing submitted
  • Jack Freiburger (short story, part 3, “Jesus Walked inti the IHOP”) . . .nothing submitted
  • Tracey Gemmell (chapters 11-13, Casa Something) . . . I received several nice comments about how much readers were enjoying the story. The humourous parts are going over well. The metaphor of the jet skies bumping awkwardly was appreciated. Mike wasn’t convinced a kinked fuel line would cause the right effect so he has provided a stuck throttle sequence he feels works better. Jerry pointed out that George Hamilton may not go over well in the UK as he’s an unknown there. Rebecca stated I wrote well but she found the Pepto-Bismol chapter boring and she’d like to hear from Lester’s POV. Amber said she had few comments as the chapters felt polished. Many thanks for all your support.
  • John Schneller (chapters 13, Final Stronghold) . . . Final Stronghold chapter thirteen is a bit of a challenge due to all talk and little physical movement. Most were tolerant of this but the natives may be getting restless. Rebecca questioned whether the Emperor was really good, and some were not convinced that a beaver would know the origins of good and evil, but most who have worked their way through the saga stayed with the storyline. Thanks!
  • Amber Boudreau (chapters 24-26, The Dragoneer) . . . Amber submitted three chapters (24-26) this week in an effort to push her rewrite through. (The exciting conclusion can be found in the July 18 folder.) John found one particular moment ‘precious’, which makes Amber worry that it might stand out too much in a bad way. Pat wondered if Moira, being of mixed heritage, would be mindful of getting her hair wet in the shower. She also wanted to know how wide an Aryx is anyway. Kashmira, Tracey, and Pat thought Moira should really have a chance to relax at the dance before things go crazy. Larry disagreed and thought things moved along well. Pat, at least would like some more slow dancing.
  • Jerry Peterson (short story, “With Mac”) . . . Several pointed out that Ruck’s poker hand – aces over eights – is a dead man’s hand. Was that intended to foreshadow what might happen to Ruck later in the story, Larry Sommers asked. “Hadn’t thought about that,” said Jerry. “No, I’ll change Ruck’s hand. He’s not going to die.” John Schneller thought MacArthur’s last line at the end of the story should be cut to make for a better ending.

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Tuesdays with Story
June 9, 2017

 

Tuesday evening at B&N

A baker’s dozen gathered around one teeny, tiny table to critique the work of seven of our colleagues. Here are the summaries:

  • Amber Boudreau (chapters 21-23, The Dragoneer) . . .
  • Millie Mader (short story, part 1, “Stone Cold Stripper”) . . .I received quite a lot of critiques on my opening chapter. Mostly to rearrange some of the paragraphs and to make it all more clear. I will start working on it this weekend. Thanks for taking on this job.  Millie
  • Eva Mays (chapter 12, Dhuoda) . . .The intrigue of the story starts to build up in Chapter 12. There were some character inconsistencies that need to be fixed. Kashmira pointed out that Dhuoda probably wouldn’t reveal what Gerberga told her with no provocation, and Mike thought she should be better at hiding her emotions at this point. Jerry mentioned that there wasn’t precicely “nothing” under the dead woman’s sleeve, and also that shears can’t actually clatter from someone’s hand. Thanks for the notes, everyone!
  • Mike Austin (chapters 10-13, Riding with the Reed Gang) . . .I received a lot of good input for my chapters of “Reed Gang.” There was some discussion of how disturbing Smitty is and whether that scene could be toned down a little or stay gritty. I also need to choose better and more varied names. There was much fun poked at the similarities, even making it sound like a Dr. Suess story. Thanks everyone for mocking me! But seriously, yes, I do need to work at that. The thing that was mentioned that I was seeing as the biggest problem was the length of time focused solely on Nick, and then suddenly bringing Ida back into the picture. I’m not sure just yet how I can remedy that, if it will be with some editing or with new chapters being written. Thank you all for reading and commenting. 

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Fifth Tuesday stories
May 30, 2017

Writing challenge: You are cleaning your house (apartment, dwelling space, etc), and you come on a room you have never seen before. What’s in it?

Max length: 500 words

Life on a Shelf

Lisa Jisa

I crouched down on the closet floor to shove the last box out of the way. Although I had moved in eight months earlier, this box hadn’t been touched since. As I placed my hands down for leverage to stand up, I noticed a small door. I pushed the box over a few more inches and twisted the door’s latch. It popped open easily.

I peered into the opening and discovered a small room no bigger than a twin-sized bed. I crawled in and saw a short wooden bookcase along the opposite wall. A white hurricane-style lamp with pink flowers sat on the top shelf, and to my surprise, it turned on when I tried it.

A Moroccan-patterned cushion rested next to the bookshelf. With one hand, I pulled it over to sit on while my other hand reached for a book. The spine of the salmon-colored cover said COURAGE. I crossed my legs and leafed through the pages.

My eyes rested on a page that said 1984. “Spanish teacher let me speak to our class about the meaning and purpose of life. I knew I had to do it after brother of another student took his life over the weekend.” That sounded vaguely familiar. I turned a few more pages. 1990. “First day at Woodland Elementary. 29 students, all in my care for the entire school year.” That was familiar, too. Was this book about me? Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
May 19, 2017

Tuesday evening

Fourteen gathered. One gentle soul was missing—and missed. There’ll always be a seat at the table for you, Judith.

Here’s a taste of the critiques:

Paul Wagner (prologue, part 1, Rise of the Serpent): No critique summary.

Pat Edwards (chapters 9-10, on purpose): “Pat received good feedback to look at how the myths and personal stories are used for examples in the chapters. The references need to be given enough explanation for those who are unfamiliar with the myth, but not bore those who are familiar. John proposed that one myth be used throughout so the reader can follow better. Most thought the stage synopsis at the start of each chapter was useful.”

Tracey Gemmell (chapters 8-10, Casa Something). “Chapters were considered well developed. Cindi identified some noteworthy turns of phrase. She questioned the notion Taylor hadn’t thought about her father in years, as she seemed to think about him often. Eva thought the work polished, but wished she liked Annie more. Larry said he would buy the book—if he weren’t reading it for free now. Jerry’s waiting for, more, belly, laughs, and, more, commas. The group diagnosed Tracey with a curtain disorder. Tracey will seek (window) treatment. She thanks you all for your concern.”

Amber Boudreau (chapters 18-20, The Dragoneer): “Amber had three chapters reviewed by the group as she attempts to finish up her rewrite by mid-summer. The note the Librarian leaves for Moira confused a lot of people. Some thought it referred to a combination of some sort, or directions, but it did not. The beginning of Chapter 20 went over well and people appeared to enjoy Moira’s discovery that her spell affected the forest. John thought two characters could be sparring while they talked at the beginning of Chapter 18 to give it some physicality.” Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
May 5, 2017

 

Tuesday evening at the old book shoppe

Fifteen gathered around a long, table set-up, so long that those on the ends had to shout to be heard by their opposites as we critiqued the work of seven of our colleagues. Here’s some of what was said:

  • Rebecca Rettenmund (chapter 2, Hunting for Dad): No submission.
  • Millie Mader (poem, “Texas”): “I don’t have much to submit re my poem. Mainly I was corrected on not using capital letters where required, plus some punctuation.”
  • Nora O’Reilly (chapter 11, Bill; McCormick’s Bliss): “It was suggested that I add more internal dialogue for Bill about his conflict between his ties as a monk with his growing attraction to Margo. We also discussed that I should enrich Bill’s inner dialogue throughout the first part of the novel to make it more appealing to readers. Finally, I need to reword the very last sentence with Margo asking where Bill was on the day of the Sterling Hall bombing. It sounds like an interrogation currently.”
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