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Tuesdays with Story
November 18, 2016

Who’s up next . . .

December 6: Pat Edwards (???), Amber Boudreau (chapter 11, The Dragoneer), Kashmira Sheth (part 4, I Am From Here, Too), John Schneller (chapter 7, Final Stronghold), Eva Mays (chapter 7, Dhuoda), Paul Wagner (???), and Mike Austin (chapter, Before I Leave).

November 15: Millie Mader (poem), Jen Wilcher (chapter, Hogoshiro Chronicles), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), Hannah Marshall (poems), Cindi Dyke (chapter, North Road), Jerry Peterson (chapter, Night Flight), and Tracey Gemmell (novel,chapter).

Tuesday eve at the B&N . . .

Guest and now new member John Stephens was among the 11 writers around the tables. Also, among the group was former second-and-fourther Jack Freiburger now active with us.

Here’s some of what was shared during the critique session: Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
November 4, 2016

 

Who’s up next . . .

November 15:   Millie Mader (poem), Jen Wilcher (chapter, fictional autobiography), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), Hannah Marshall (poems), Cindi Dyke (chapter, North Road), Meg Goss (chapter, novel), and Tracey Gemmell (novel, chapter).

December 6: Pat Edwards (???), Amber Boudreau (chapter 11, The Dragoneer), Kashmira Sheth (???), John Schneller (chapter 7, Final Stronghold), Eva Mays (chapter 7, Dhuoda), Paul Wagner (???), and Mike Austin (chapter, Before I Leave).

 

Tuesday eve at the B&N . . .

Former second-and-fourther Paul Wagner joined us around the table. Here’s some of what was shared during the critique session:

Amber Boudreau (chapter 10, The Dragoneer) . . .

Here is a summary of my review from last night.

Amber read from chapter 10 of the Dragoneer. When the protagonist asks another character for a favor, Pat wondered why they weren’t happier about it, as we know that character likes the protagonist. Kashmira questioned if Moira had any social skills to begin with. Jerry enjoyed the strong verb choice at the end of the chapter.

John Schneller (chapter 6, Final Stronghold) . . .

Chapter 6 of Final Stronghold needed some work as the consensus was too much talking and not enough action. Although the author promises more running and less talking in the next chapters, this was a valuable assessment. Changes made. The other dynamic discussed was as to whether a reader can get a proper sense of pacing by reading one chapter a month. To that end, Pat created a file in our group site so that we can load a book or section of a book. I look forward to anyone’s assessment.  Thanks!! Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
October 21, 2016

Who’s up next . . .

November 1: Pat Edwards (???), Hannah Marshall (poems, Earthy Things” and “Foster Child”), Kashmira Sheth (???), John Schneller (chapter 6, Final Stronghold), Eva Mays (chapter 6, Dhuoda), Bob Kralapp (???), and Amber Boudreau (chapter 9, The Dragoneer).

November 15:   Millie Mader (poem), Jen Wilcher (chapter, fictional autobiography), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), Judith McNeil (???), Cindi Dyke (chapter, North Road), and Meg Goss (chapter, novel).

Tuesday eve at the B&N . . .

New member Meg Goss joined the circle of first-and-thirders as did Jen Wilcher, formerly of our sister group. Here’s some of what was shared during the critique session:

Millie Mader (poem, “Loss of Innocense”) . . . Generally, I think my poem was pretty well received. A few word changes were suggested.

Nora O’Reilly (chapter 5, Bill McCormick’s Bliss) . . . Jerry corrected me: the commander in chief  is the abbot, where his prior would be chief of staff. I can easily cut down on my use of ‘really’ or ‘very.’ Most importantly I need to find a more compelling reason as to why Joel is returning to Madison. Perhaps trying to let Bill and Evelyn reunite so she can tell him about their son is enough. I do need to consider Bill’s reaction to the impending danger of Joel returning to the city of his crime. I have to investigate the statute of limitations on murder and what consequences Joel would face if he were caught in the present times. A few wording changes were also suggested.

Tracey Gemmell (chapter 1-2, novel) . . . Group felt it was generally well written and humorous. Jerry noted some hyphenation issues and suggested some segmentation of longer paragraphs into short, punchy ones to add emphasis.Group pointed out that some British terms may require further explanation for an American audience, and that Taylor’s age required clarification, as they initially thought she was younger than she was. Pat noted she didn’t feel chapter two was as believable as chapter one, and she requested more explanation as to whether Taylor had quit her job or was fired. Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
October 7, 2016

Who’s up next . . .

October 11:

October 18:   Millie Mader (poem), Hannah Marshall (poems), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), Judith McNeil (???), Tracey Gemmell (chapter 1,new novel), and Amber Boudreau (chapter 9, The Dragoneer).

October 25:

November 1: Pat Edwards (???), Kashmira Sheth (???), John Schneller (chapter 6, Final Stronghold), Eva Mays (chapter, Dhuoda), Bob Kralapp (???), and Mike Austin (synopsis and Jim chapter, Before I Leave).

Tuesday eve at the B&N . . .

Guest and now new member Tracey Gemmell joined the circle of first-and-thirders gathered to critique a cluster of chapters. Here’s some of what was shared:

Amber Boudreau (chapter 8, The Dragoneer) . . . Amber read from the beginning of chapter 8 of The Dragoneer. Pat liked it, but wondered if/when we were going to meet another character from a previous draft (This sounds like the title to a story someone hasn’t written, yet: Character From a Previous Draft. Horror, perhaps?) Amber told her she doesn’t have long to wait. Eva noted a particular sentence that was repetitive. Amber vowed to change it. Kashmira thought one character would show more surprised about the things he was seeing, but Amber said he wouldn’t because he already read about them. Continue Reading »

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Tuesdays with Story
September 22, 2016

 

Who’s up next . . .

October 4: Pat Edwards (???), Amber Boudreau (chapter 9, The Dragoneer), John Schneller (chapter 5, Final Stronghold), Eva Mays (chapter 4, Dhuoda), Bob Kralapp (???), and Mike Austin (chapter 15, Before I Leave).

October 11:

October 18:   Millie Mader (poem), Hannah Marshall (poems), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), and Judith McNeil (???).

 

Tuesday eve at the B&N . . .

Twelve first-and-thirders gathered around the table to critique three poems, a whole bunch of chapters, and two short stories. Here’s some of what was shared:

Millie Mader (poem, “My Texas Garden”) . . . Regarding my poem, it was generally quite well received. A few changes were suggested, and I will work on them. Thanks for all who read my submission and commented.

Cindi Dyke (chapters 3-4, North Road) . . .Hannah liked the main character’s vision at the end of chapter four where she sees her reflection in the mirror morph to a lifeless image. There was discussion about the dynamics between the sisters. Jerry thought the older sister is very self-absorbed, but she was intended to be characterized as controlling/manipulative to set up future conflict between them. Discussion was very helpful as I try to work that out. Thank you for sharing your insights  Continue Reading »

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Writer’s Mail
Tuesdays with Story
September 8, 2016

 

The first word . . .

“Making people believe the unbelievable is no trick; it’s work. … Belief and reader absorption come in the details: An overturned tricycle in the gutter of an abandoned neighborhood can stand for everything.” – Stephen King (1947- ), novelist/short story writer

 

Millie Mader, published author!

Said Millie in a recent note, “Just letting you all know that my novel is now available on Nook and Kindle!!!! Without Pat’s help it could never have been published. I did credit Tuesdays, and I thank all of you for the years of helpful critiques – especially Jerry.”

Here are the links so you can download Millie’s ebook, Baby Blue:

– Kindle . . . Baby Blue on Kindle

– Nook . . . Baby Blue on the Nook

Now do one more thing. Go to Millie’s book pages on Amazon and B&N and post a review of Baby Blue.

 

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Fifth Tuesday stories
August 30, 2016
Writing challenge: A superhero makes a career change. Do not identify the superhero you select in your story, but do plant enough clues that readers can guess who it is.

Max length: 500 words

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