Writer’s Mail
Tuesdays with Story
November 6, 2018
At ye olde bookshop
Seven TWS writers gathered around a real table at B&N Westside to work through the submissions of five of their colleagues. Here are some of the comments shared:
Lisa McDougal (chapter 7, The Tebow Family Secret) . . . Jerry felt that this version of Ahna is wimpy. Group suggested Glenn’s more character development. There was so incorrect phrasing issues that needs to be fixed. Visual setting needs to be flushed out more. Overuse of 2 words.
Jack Freiburger (chapter 19, A Walk Upon the Water) . . . The mid part of Lester’s foundation tale seemed well received. There were a few grammar discussions, use of parenthesis, etc., but readers reported they enjoyed the chapter and the written comments were supportive. Lester’s first tale will wrap up next meeting and then we will proceed form fantasy to adventure to disaster as Sean comes back into focus. (more…)
