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Writer’s Mail Tuesdays With Story

Writer’s Quote:
“Writing a novel is like driving a car at night. You can only see as far as your headlights, but you can make the whole trip that way.” — E.L. Doctorow

Tuesday at the B & N:
Just a mini-meeting Tuesday at the bookstore. Summer must be infiltrating everyone else’s soul!

Rebecca Rettenmund read chapter 5 of The Cheese Logue, entitled “The Packers.” She says she is in the process of completely rewriting all of her chapters to weave in the personal story better with the essays. Jen liked the description of how businesses are completely dead during a Packer game. Kaitlyn wondered if the parts with Sophie would be cut – yes, they are. Carol suggested changing the fan’s cap from blue to red, because blue suggests Bear’s fan. (actually, thinking later with the two guys – one should have a green cap and one should be yellow). Kat liked how they were described as Blue and Green each time they spoke. And Terry offered the “cheese” caution – the word popped up too many times while describing the Packer gear.

Terry Hoffman read chapter 11 of The Great Tome. Rebecca felt that Ace wasn’t really sorry – it’s just something people say. Kaitlyn liked it, though, because it showed Rachel’s distrust. Jen was a little confused by the daydreaming at the start of the chapter. Carol wanted to see more physical reactions to go with the dialog. Jen thought more physical gestures throughout would create a clearer picture. Kat pointed out that Rachel might wonder what happened after she blacked out. She could have hurt Doug & not remembered it.

Who’s up next . . .

July 31: Fifth Tuesday (more…)

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Tuesdays with Story
WRITER’S MAIL for December 26, 2010
by Clayton Gill

Good Words from Way Back
True ease in writing comes from art, not chance,
As those move easiest who have learn’d to dance.
’T is not enough no harshness gives offence,
The sound must seem an echo to the sense.
–Alexander Pope (1688–1744) in Essay on Criticism

Dear “Happily Embarrassed,”
In recent e-mail to fellow Tuesday with Story members, Alicia Connolly-Lohr announced the publication of her book Lawyer Lincoln In Transit To Freedom: An historical nonfiction novel. It’s now available at Amazon.com (http://www.amazon.com/Lawyer-Lincoln-Transit-Freedom-historical/dp/1453849424/ref=sr_1_5?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1293407805&sr=1-5), where the listing includes the book’s first enthusiastic review by an admiring relative. Despite Alicia’s blush, any embarrassment is uncalled for.

Alicia is an attorney herself. In the novel’s court room scenes, the young Abraham Lincoln argues a case involving a runaway female slave. Alicia’s real-life experience adds to the blow-by-blow realism of the drama.

Of course, we all know Lincoln as a legendary orator, statesman, and U.S. President. However, in Alicia’s story, we encounter some of Lincoln’s pivotal moral and ethical dilemmas, his charm and gift for persuasion, and his beginnings as one of our nation’s greatest leaders.

Lawyer Lincoln is another TWS success story: Enjoy and review!

Reading Recap: December 21 Meeting
First-and-Third group met at Alicia Ashman Branch Library to review work by Randy Haselow, Greg Spry, Leah Wilbur, John Schneller, and Jerry Peterson. Linda Meyer had prepared to take the place of Justin Schober, but her work did not get full circulation in advance of the meeting and the group ran out of time for its consideration. The group rescheduled review of Linda’s work for future meeting. (more…)

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Writer’s Mail for October 28, 2010
by Pat Edwards

“Me fail english? Thats unpossible.” – Ralph Wiggum, The Simpsons

The Pumpkin Challenge
In honor of the upcoming holiday, Webook.com is doing a pumpkin challenge. Your pumpkin can take any form (carved, cursed, animated, giant, murderous, a pie) but it must cause terror in a person or group of people. Real terror. None of that mushy “moderate fear” kind of thing.

Write a scary story in which a pumpkin is the main catalyst for terror. (max 300 words)

The WEbook editorial staff will pick our three favorite submissions and award the authors free entry to PageToFame. Go to http://www.webook.com/project/The-Pumpkin-Challenge for rules and information.

Who’s up Next?
November 2: Amber Boudreau (chapter 16, young adult novel), John Schneller (chapter 2, Final Stronghold), Greg Spry (chapter, Beyond Cloud Nine), Randy Haslow (chapter, Hona and the Dragon), Judith McNeil (???), and Jerry Peterson (chapter 4, Thou Shalt Not Murder).

November 9: Kim Simmons (chapters, City of Winter), Randy Haslow (chapter, Hona and the Dragon), Annie Potter (memoir), Carol Hornung (scene, Sapphire Lodge), and Sariah (???).

November 16: Greg Spry (chapter, Beyond Cloud Nine), Pat Edwards (poems), Chris Maxwell (rewrite, short story), Cathy Riddle (chapter, Beer Crimes), Aaron Boehm (chapter, Hell Cage), and Kim Simmons (chapter, City of Summer).

December 7: Clayton Gill (chapter, Fishing Derby), Justin Schober (chapter 1/part 2, sci-fi novel), Jen Wilcher (chapter), and Jerry Peterson (chapter 5, Thou Shalt Not Murder).

Publishing Lawyer Lincoln
From Alicia Connolly-Lohr
I just self-published my historical fiction novel Lawyer Lincoln In Transit to Freedom on Amazon in the Kindle store. I’m currently working on my Author Central page for Amazon. I have also submitted the book to createspace.com (owned by Amazon but run as a separate business). There it will be available as a publish-on-demand book. Just awaiting the proof. Although TWS in on my acknowledgements page, I want to pass on special thanks all who helped with critiques. Thanks so much.

Need a Character Name?
Why waste precious intellectual energy creating names yourself? This absolutely wonderful site has several random name generators. There’s a pseudonym generator, a fantasy name generator, an elf name generator, a superhero name generator and a lot MORE! My new evil twin name is going to be Savage Acholateezit, courtesy of the evil name generator. Here’s the main site link http://online-generator.com/index.php Don’t miss the “business section,” which includes project names and band names. What kind of music do you think the The Homeless Clouds create? (more…)

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Writer’s Mail for October 20, 2010
by Pat Edwards

“When we read, we start at the beginning and continue until we reach the end. When we write, we start in the middle and fight our way out.” – Vickie Karp

Tuesday, October 19th at the Barnes and Noble
Kim shares a couple short chapters from her novel – Alicia liked it, but she would have liked the dream sequence without italics better. Jerry was bothered by the break between the chapters and suggested making two chapters into one. Pat likes short chapters, but these were really itty-bitty. Greg didn’t care about the chapter on reading lessons, which interrupts two others, the ones Jerry wants to go together. Alicia was confused between the uses of the word goddess and god. It’s hard to follow. Greg also thought one character was a little too boisterous (with an excess of exclamation points). Jerry and Pat thought the dialogue/accent of one character was overdone and hard to read.

Millie shares chapter 21 of her novel, “Life On Hold,” and a synopsis of the story. Pat really enjoyed all of Millie’s imagery, but she was concerned about the use of the MRI in that time period. The table seems to think they would have taken a regular x-ray of her head. Jerry thinks her main character needs to be more firm with her break-up speech. Kim suggests she might be afraid. Greg thought one character went from not being able to talk to being able to drive off in a short amount of time. We don’t miss how the ambulance got there because the story’s from one characters point of view and she’s knocked out for that. Greg thought the chapter ended with a cliffhanger. Jerry had a problem with the Emergency Room doc. He wasn’t out there and doesn’t know who’s connected to whom, so he won’t be able to tell someone their friend has passed away.

About the synopsis…Alicia is bothered that we still don’t know what the main character is facing and why she’s looking back over these years of her life. Why do we even need the older Erin at the beginning of each chapter? Millie tells us she’s reviewing her life and how she’s ended up where she is now. Alicia doesn’t think that’s enough. We’re all wondering what the connection is. (more…)

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Writer’s Mail for October 13, 2010
by Pat Edwards

“To write what is worth publishing, to find honest people to publish it, and get sensible people to read it, are the three great difficulties in being an author.” – Charles Caleb Colton

2nd/4th Update from the B&N
Second & Fourth is hosting!
We need a place to hold the event!
We need an event organizer! (someone to be sure we have cups, plates, etc).

Please contact Carol ASAP if you can help!

We only had a few pieces to critique, but a fair turnout Tuesday night.

Kim Simmons presented Chapter 16 of her novel, City in Winter. Annie suggested illustrating the story! She’d like to be able to see more of what’s going on. Dan said to establish earlier that the centaur armor is leather – the term breastplate implies metal. Andrea got caught on the term “Moonies” for people from Moon City. Still a little too close to the 60s-70s cult of Moonies that folks over 40 remember. Maybe play with other words for moon, like Luna. Carol said that everyone seemed to know what was going on – someone needs to say “what the hell was that?????” now and then, which would also allow for a chance to explain the magic to the readers.

Annie Potter read “Suppertime,” a chapter from her memoir. Carol’s response: “I, uh, I added a couple of commas.” Very well done, dramatic moment in the story – not much to be changed! Homemade is one word, and sorry-ass needs a hyphen. . . Dan said he wasn’t sure the girl was being shaken until the narration said “I’ve never been shaken before” so that needs a stronger description. Otherwise, very powerful.

Carol Hornung brought in a piece of another scene from Sapphire Lodge. Dan and Kim wanted to know how Saffi is experiencing the colors she equates with emotions. Kim stated that the colors are too normal – green for pain is good, but blue for authority is pretty common. Andrea suggested more specific colors: baby blue or cobalt or navy, etc. Expand the color palate. Watch the dialog, too. Saffi would say something, and Donovan would rephrase the same thing a short while later.

2nd/4th also need to find a meeting place for December, when BN commandeers our tables – any ideas??? (more…)

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Writer’s Mail

Writer’s Mail 10/3/2010
by Kimberly Simmons

“In Hollywood the woods are full of people that learned to write but evidently can’t read. If they could read their stuff, they’d stop writing.” ~Will Rogers

Notes from 9-21-10
Kim has good news – she’s finished her second book! About an hour before we meet.

Judith shares the end of her radio play, South to Sunday. Millie thought one character was getting nicer toward the end. Pat T. liked it, and reflects that he enjoys listening to everyone read their stories. Kim wanted to know what, “the real McCoy,” meant. Pat T. enlightened everyone. Randy thought the end was a little abrupt. Amber wondered if two characters could argue over driving responsibilities.

Aaron shares the second part of his screenplay, Hell Cage. Judith thinks the story’s tension is building a little fast. Amber questioned the introduction of a character who doesn’t have any lines in the scene. Jerry had a question about the cage opening. Millie wondered about what might happen next. Pat T. mentioned setting up a duality between language that gets used in the ring versus language that might get used backstage.

Pat T. shares the final installment of Any Port in a Storm. Jen wanted to know why thoughts were underlined. Cathy thought the ending was very satisfying, but she wondered about the sea-bat. Pat says he included the bat because his mother-in-law hates bats. And falcons are overdone. Judith thought the character was pretty tough. Jerry wants to see the men thinking about their choices instead of being told. Cathy wondered what might happen if some wit was added to the end of the story to show a connection between father and daughter.

Kim shares a chapter of The City of Summer. Jerry wanted to know what kind of pattern was shaved into the fur of one creature. Pat T. agreed giving the reader an idea of the pattern would be good. He also agreed with Bill that some additional foreshadowing would be of use. Kim tells us that the city of summer is inspired by a real place in Spain. Some of us didn’t get the chapter in time to read it and have notes. Ahem.

Jerry shares the first chapter of Thou Shalt Not Murder. Amber had a question about what forty thousand dollars might look like and why doesn’t anyone mention it if it’s so odd. Cathy thought a good way for women to relate to the main female character was to describe the boy the character had had a crush on, why she liked him, and if her tastes changed at all. Randy didn’t get one character’s obesity for a page and a half. Pat T. thought there was still a bit too much telling instead of showing.

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Tuesdays with Story
WRITER’S MAIL for August 6, 2010
by Clayton Gill

Another Madison with Good Ink
It was a hot and sticky night. In my backyard, the long dog day of August collapsed at last and rolled over in the dark to pant with tongue hanging out. Distant lightning bared its fangs, but I heard no bark, no growl of thunder.

Unfortunately, I heard no Tuesdays with Story members begging for ink in Writer’s Mail, either. So I prodded the laptop to attention and googled “visiting writers” plus “Madison.” Then I discovered there is another Madison, a lively writers’ place, back East in Connecticut. This New England Madison is the home of RJ Julia Booksellers (http://www.rjjulia.com/) where mystery writer Karen E. Olson regularly reads her work.

Karen has a part-time day job editing a medical journal at Yale University. But she also has seven books under her by-line, including three in a series called “The Tatoo Shop Mysteries”—every book features “ink” in the title. See http://www.kareneolson.com/index.html. For insight into Karen’s choice of narration style and point-of-view, check out her blog at http://kareneolson.blogspot.com/.

Many thanks to Greg Spry for editing Writer’s Mail during July. Please see below for the “Newsletter Duty Roster,” which needs editors to volunteer for October and November.

But hey fellow Tuesdays, we’ve got more dog days ahead, so please throw some meat – or ink – to your August newsletter editor. Always hungry, despite the heat. Thanks! (more…)

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