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Writer’s Mail for 05/14/13

“A character is never the author who created him. It is quite likely, however, that an author may be all his characters simultaneously. “– Albert Camus

Tuesday at B&N . . .

Amber shared chapter thirteen of Noble with the group. Lisa took notes. Judith liked the chapter and was interested to see where it would lead concerning the main character’s training. Lisa thought the chapter ended on a good note. Pat had a couple of questions about entering the woods and things going quiet. She also has a question about bow anatomy. Andy didn’t think the chapter had a enough zing and suggested putting it on a shelf and coming back to it later.

Mike shared a poem with the group. He doesn’t have copies so we all listened. Betsy and Andy liked the last line. Pat liked the rhythm but one of the lines didn’t resonate with her. She says she needs to read a poem a couple of times before she gets it. Pat and Lisa found a lot of power in the words and expect that Mike would channel a Maori warrior when he reads it. Mike says he felt that way when he read it. The second poem Mike shares with the group is a letter to a person who had a lot of influence on him as he was growing up. Betsy and Pat think it could be turned into a prose poem format and suggest editing it down. Lisa knows the music Mike is referring to and is in favor of polishing it up and sending it to them.

Lisa shared part of chapter one of Tebow Family Secret. Andy thought it was an effective opening but that there was a lot of info dropped on the reader. Pat thought a lot of what she read could be cut and instead sprinkled in with her visit to the therapist. Pat thinks a therapist wouldn’t ask a lot of yes or no questions, but more leading, open-ended questions. Andy liked the ending but Pat thought she could have left it in a cliffhanger. The group looks up and briefly discusses what a chiasma is in literature.

Judith shared part of chapter one of My Mother, Savior of Men. Lisa says she knows she knows mothers like the one in the story. Pat liked the word choice. Andy didn’t believe a woman of ninety-five wouldn’t sleep that much. Also he thought there was an info dump at the end though Pat liked the narrative at the end because it made a good story. Lisa wanted more of one character and agreed with Andy about the end. (more…)


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Writer’s Mail
January 17, 2013
By Pat Edwards

“I write because I’m afraid to say some things out loud.” ~Gordon Atkinson

1st and 3rd Notes 1-15-2013 – thanks, Amber!
Nine gather around the tables for the first, first and third, of 2013.

We begin with Clayton’s Chapter Seventeen of Fishing Derby. He reads some last minute edits inspired by Alicia’s comments. Pat likes some of his old sentences better and wonders if Sherriff’s wear Smoky Bear hats in this part of Illinois, where the story is set. Jerry wonders what state police are doing there anyway and if he were outside a gated community wouldn’t they have their own security. We discuss the character’s motivation for a time and wonder how we can make it clear. Millie asks what a glass pack is. Jerry wonders why one kid doesn’t say something earlier about another character getting his name wrong. Rebecca has a question about pacing in the beginning and a comment about rhythm.
Rebecca shares Chapter Seventeen of her Cheese Log(-ue). We’re all fighting about whether to include the UE in Logue or not. Rebecca wonders if the section she reads needs to be cut, but Pat liked it. Opinion in this piece is okay. Clayton had a question about the location of a block of thought. Pat suggests turning it into dialogue. Alicia has trouble grasping the particular meaning of ‘processed’ cheese. Factories only make one type of cheese and why is that bad? The reader needs some clarification here.
Alicia starts us off with Chapter One of Lincoln’s Other War. Clayton thought it was a wonderful opening and asks what the Dakota Sioux called themselves. We discuss how to get around this – perhaps with a map, or in dialogue? Amber wonders if we have to know one character is from Illinois right away. Michelle thinks the conversation between Lincoln and his secretary is effective but there is some switching from formal to more intimate speech that she found jarring. Jerry didn’t want Lincoln sitting in this chapter at all; he wanted him standing and pacing. (more…)

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Tuesdays With Story
WRITER’S MAIL for December 21, 2012

Good Words from Way Back

At Christmas I no more desire a rose
Than wish a snow in May’s new-fangled mirth;
But like of each thing that in season grows.
So you, to study now it is too late,
Climb o’er the house to unlock the little gate.

–Biron to Ferdinand, King of Navarre, in Act 1, Scene 1 of Love’s Labours Lost (1598) by William Shakespeare (1564-1616), courtesy of The Literature Network (http://www.online-literature.com/shakespeare/lovelost/1/)

December 18 Meeting: Eight Gathered ’Round
“Eight of us gathered ’round tables at the Alicia Ashman Library for the last meeting of 2012,” reports Amber Boudreau of First-and-Third group.

Lisa McDougal read from Chapter 9 of Follow the Yellow and noted her own doubts about the last line she had read. Amber Boudreau suggested dropping that sentence altogether. Pat Edwards liked a fight scene she thought was “well-blocked,” but she wished at that point the main character could talk to a friend. Jerry Peterson enjoyed the fight scene but had a few concerns. He suggested Lisa could cut everything before her asterisks, because there’s a lot of telling instead of showing. Pat wasn’t squeamish about foul language in the chapter, but thought Lisa could cut out some of it and avoid offending her audience. Millie Mader questioned a character’s abilities and imagined the mother would be more concerned and not so accepting. Pat saw the mother as concerned, but practical.

Amber Boudreau offered “a reiteration” of Chapter 6 of her YA novel, tentatively titled Noble. Pat hated that the Librarian struck her as a vampire and wondered whether he might not smell like old books. Lisa expected one character to be more aggressive and confused, less accepting. Jerry wanted to see Moira work to put a nook back instead of just finding where it goes. Everyone seemed to agree this chapter was much more tightly written than before. (more…)

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