Writer’s Mail
February 6, 2013
Notes from 2/5/2013
A new person, Andy, joined us for the evening!
Lisa starts us off with a rewrite of a chapter nine from Follow the Yellow. Pat thought the dialogue was more realistic and the blocking better during the fight that takes place. Pat wonders if another character would be as flirtatious if she had been raped. Jen thinks Lisa is adding the rape to help explain another characters’ over protectiveness. Around the table, we decide the rape doesn’t really add anything to the character. Jerry has a question about a couple of terms the cop and the construction worker use with one another. Jen had some issues with page three and four and POV.
Clayton shares Chapter eighteen of Fishing Derby. Clayton wonders if Miker does a little too much star-gazing—the group thinks so. Pat suggests putting a lot of the exposition into dialogue amongst the group at the table; if they’re kids then there should be more monkeyshines going on. We discuss the age of the kids and what kind of things might be happening around those times in school. Pat wonders if Clayton should establish a little more backstory on how his main character knows what he does. Jerry wants to see an aloof clocktower.
Amber shares Chapter seven of Noble. Pat likes the eating of the rocks. Lisa wondered how big a one-ton dragon would be. And other great comments I’m not fast enough to type. (more…)
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