Tuesdays with Story
August 7, 2016
Who’s up next . . .
August 16: Mike Austin (chapter, Before I Leave), Millie Mader (poem), Hannah Marshall (poems), Nora O’Reilly (chapter, Bill McCormick’s Bliss), Eva Mays (chapter, Dhuoda), Judith McNeil (???), and Amit Trivedi (chapter, novel).
August 30: Fifth Tuesday!
September 6: Pat Edwards (???), Randy Slagel (part ???, “Watered-Down Witch”), Amber Boudreau (chapter 5, The Dragoneer), John Schneller (chapter 4, Final Stronghold), Cindi Dyke (chapter, North Road), Bob Kralapp (poem, “March Morning at the Library”), and Jerry Peterson (???).
Around the circle at B&N Westside . . .
Here are the first-and-third writers who had pieces up for critiques Tuesday evening:
– Pat Edwards (poem, “Insomnia”) . . . Over all feedback was positive with most people wondering if the character was really awake or if she was dreaming. Amber recommended the first line be changed to reflect that wondering.
– Amber Boudreau (chapter 4, The Dragoneer) . . . Chapter 4 of the Dragoneer was well received in general. Pat had a problem with the protagonist being fine with collecting rocks for the wyvern, just some comment about this being her new normal would be helpful. She also didn’t like the line about the radio. Eva and others wondered what the officer had to say to Ansel, but the author is not saying. (more…)