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Writer’s Mail

Writer’s Mail
March 10, 2012

“I write what I think you should know; not what you think you know.” -Unknown speaker regarding her writing style

First and Third recap- 3/6/2012
Greg: Beyond Cloud Nine- Chapter 18
• Pat notes the small quote at the beginning of the chapter. To her it moved really fast – she had to slow herself down to critique the piece. What does it look like to move from the third to the fourth dimension? The only part Pat didn’t like concerned X-ray vision. She thought there would be more of energy and waves experience.
• Jerry wants to know how a pilot would handle flying through the shift. Also, Jerry wants to know why one character plays the ditz after showing a real depth of knowledge.
• Rebecca had an aesthetic issue – she wanted to see something unique on the ship in every room.
• Jerry didn’t think the character would be instantly calm at the end after she’s shrieking.
• Greg would like to thank everyone for their critiques in the past, as they helped him make it to the second round of Amazon’s Breakout Novel Contest.
• Greg got a bit of feedback for Goodbye Mars. Pat points out that insect only have 6 legs – not 8. If it had 8, it would be an arachnid. Also Pat wonders if blue eyes would still be around that far in the future.

• Liam shares some sad news with the group; her grandfather passed away recently. She shares the eulogy she wrote with the group. Pat suggests she reuse some of the imagery as several of us laugh out loud at different parts.
• She also shared photos

Aaron: What Hath God Wrought?-Screenplay
• Rebecca and Lisa found it a little sappy when one character started crying in front of his coworker.
• Pat had a question about electricity and wires.
• Jerry thought it was interesting that the jar tipped over and the fluid ran out, but we never saw the brain.
• Aaron thinks that would make a good visual.
• Amber had a question about the ending.
• It wasn’t clear to Lisa if the one character died or not.
• Jerry suggests that a look is enough to telegraph the question (get it? telegraph?) in film. (more…)

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