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Writer’s Mail for May 16, 2012
by Jen Wilcher

Notes 5-15-12
Greg shares Chapters twenty-six through twenty-eight of Beyond Cloud Nine. We start with the very beginning of chapter twenty-six. Spike wanted to know if the cab speeding away was necessary. Before that she slams the door – Jerry thought it indicated the character was angry when she just got done with a sweet ride. Pat and Jerry liked how the help-desk character saves the day. Pat wonders about the precedent for doing autopsies without cutting into the body. Jerry references CSI: New York. Millie and Pat thought the word posterior got a lot of use. Jerry had the same comment about the word fixated and the gesture of arm crossing.
Greg reads from toward the end of Chapter twenty-seven. There’s some discussion of the third dimension of the computer screen. Andy was bothered by one character’s acceptance of another’s presence on a restricted floor. Spike wondered if it should have been hard to get in? Greg explains that it was.
We finish up with the second scene of chapter twenty-eight. Rebecca pointed out that she thought Greg wrote sentences of all about the same length and it could have flowed better with a comma here or there. Pat has a question about a future chapter – the rest of us plug our ears and try not to listen. Spike, just listening, thought the verbs were too active.

Moving on…Millie shares Chapter thirty-five with the group, reading from near the end. Rebecca noted there was a lot more action in this chapter. She also didn’t think anyone would believe the driver who dumped the gravel. Greg wondered how the state trooper would get back in touch with them if he didn’t take any of her information. Jerry asks if there was nine-one-one at that time. Pat thought one character could slip and fall instead of having a load of gravel fall on him. Andy thought the main character could say things that show she’s excited versus talking about how excited about it. Pam really liked that Millie mentioned Glen Campbell.
Rebecca shares Chapter eight of the Cheese Logue. She admits to having issues with this chapter and plans to take it apart. She informs the group that she’s removing the last chapter and this chapter. Amber asks if this is really what happened. Greg thinks this book is not just about the cheese but about Rebecca’s life as well. Pam thought the raffle added tension because it kept Rebecca busy, but perhaps didn’t need to have so much focus put on it. (more…)

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“Substitute “damn” every time you’re inclined to write “very;” your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be.” ~Mark Twain

Tuesdays With Story Writers Mail, May 27, 2010
By Carol Shay Hornung

Tuesday Night at the Bookstore

Patrick Tomlinson – wrote a very funny story about zombies being recruited to vote in Chicago. Everyone thought the dialogue was hilarious. There were opposing suggestions on whether or not the zombies should be described, including facial expressions. There was some discussion on whether the dialogue should be described with adverbs or if the dialogue should speak for itself.

Ann Potter – read from her memoir. Everyone was blown away by her writing and being able to channel a 12-year-old girl’s voice. One observation was that it reminded the person of the movie “A Christmas Story.” A suggestion was made to provide some description of how characters look, move their body when they are talking.

Holly Bonnicksen-Jones – didn’t read, but asked the group for suggestions as to how Liza should come to terms with what Taylor revealed to her. Suggestion to have her do some self-revelations through talking to a friend or sister. Then there was a strong debate over whether or how she should have closure with her ex-husband. Should she meet with him, write to him, or meet him to discuss what happened to their marriage.

Kim Simmons – read her science fiction story. The group agreed that it would be a good idea to provide a synopsis of the world she is creating so that the listeners can understand the story better. One observation was that the story needs to show how the characters impacted their physical surroundings.

Jen Wilcher – read her fan fiction story. One observation was to provide a little more context for the characters and stay true to the characters. Another observation was to not describe a character as Chewbacca, but as a sasquatch or some other more generic term.

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