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Writer’s Mail
Tuesdays With Story
July 23, 2013

Writer’s quotation . . .
“The creation of a thousand forests is in one acorn.” — Ralph Waldo Emerson

Tuesday at Barnes & Noble . . . (thank you, Carol)
Tuesday night at the bookstore it was all about Girl Power! And we had plenty to talk about.

Report from Camp: Katelin Cummins is approaching 30,000 words in the NaNoWriMo Boot Camp! Says she’s having fun but has waaaaaaaaaaaay too much information for a single novel. This is definitely an ongoing series. Still, the work has been very exciting, and she hopes to share some of it with us soon.

Rebecca Rettenmund debuted the first scene of Hale Tales. Carol loved the canaries, but also thinks we should get Phyllis’s last name (Hale) right away. Good catch phrase for Ma (“Oh for Heavens sake”) but keep it to only once or twice in the scene. Holly wanted more atmosphere. Terry really enjoyed the voice, but also wondered if the name of the town should come up sooner. Jen pointed out some passive sentences to fix, which would tighten up the scene. She also said to be aware of how people spoke in that era, which prompted a fun discussion on phrases and terms that are uniquely Wisconsin.

Terry Hoffman began the daunting task of condensing The Great Tome into a synopsis. Rebecca thought it got a little bogged down in the middle, too much “she did this” and “she did that.” Katelin wondered if the section with Ace was needed? We did suggest yes, but also said the Tome itself needs to be more prominent. Holly felt the term “swat team” was too matter-of-fact and wanted more of the resulting fear and emotion. Jen said the ending seemed to trail off – that the last line of the second-to-last paragraph is actually a great way to end it. Rebecca found the description of the climactic scene on the boat to be the most engaging. (more…)


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Writer’s Mail 4/27/2010
by Kimberly Simmons

“Start doing more; it’ll stop all these moods you’re having.”  – Ray Bradbury

Last Week
Kim – Millie and others are able to follow the story better now. Alicia wants to know why Ryoko isn’t dead from the bite. Pat thought there was some magic in the cloak. Jerry didn’t think Ryoko would be able to grab the snout of the creature as it’s biting her. Nicole wants to know why James has such a classic name whereas nearly every other character has a fantastic name. Pat wants to know why James is running through the jungle yelling, no sign of life anywhere. Kane thought the chapter ‘Darkness’ was a little too dark. How would adversaries know where their targets are? John asks for a character description of Ryoko. Kane got 19,000 hits when he googled “…an ice chill ran down her spine…”

Amber – Jerry – one more water balloon. Alicia – What’s happened in the meetings between Moira and the Wyvern? Over those weeks…what happened. John – What does and doesn’t he talk about. Nicole – spicy food, something different, build on it. Kim bothered by the end. Did she see him coming in? Kane found the language ‘caught sight,’ archaic.

Jen – Pat thought it was much better this time. She got a better sense of physical space. Millie was happy to get a list of characters via e-mail. Alicia would still like to see more description. People in law enforcement could have little descriptors to help ID them. And characters could be revealed through dress. Jerry wonders about the time release. Alicia has a work around. Kathy wonders if there will be more about the research facility.

Pat – Ladies of the Garden Club: Every variety of monkshood is poisonous. Jerry liked that all the ladies were growing something dangerous in their garden. Alicia caught a whiff of “Arsenic and Old Lace.” Could Latin names be used? Kim wants more. For My Prison: Alicia – absolutely loves the first version. Jen thought so too. John thought Pat captured the prison idea very well and wondered if an idea of escape could be offered at the end instead of directions. Shel had a problem with looking up toward the sky, ‘cause wouldn’t it be concrete?

Alicia – Pat thanks her for finally letting us know who wins, but she didn’t buy Lincoln’s internal dialogue about not wanting to win the case. Cathy, respectfully disagrees. She enjoyed reading his internal dialogue. Nicole thought the struggle had to come a little earlier along with more of it. Shel thinks there might be some pain associated with trying to win the case – physical? Kane disagrees with Pat as well and getting away from the image of ‘Honest Abe.” John wonders if he couldn’t include his thoughts about not wanting to win in his closing argument – Pat would buy that.

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Writer’s Mail 3/29/2010
by Kimberly Simmons

“It’s a nervous work. The state that you need to write is the state that others are paying large sums to get rid of.” – Shirley Hazzard

Last Week
Only 4 folks showed up on Tuesday, so we didn’t really have a meeting (though we did talk and have a great time!).

Who’s Up Next…

Carol Hornung (Asperger Sunset – same scene as sent for March 23rd)
Terry Hoffman, new story – same scene as sent for March 23rd
Holly Bonnikson-Jones, Coming Up for Air (if her computer recovers)
Jack Frieburger, Path to Bray’s Head

Anyone else who wants to hop on the schedule is welcome!

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